First of all, thank you so much for picking this prompt and for doing such a great job on it :)
I loved how you started the fic, the image of the wolves from a different POV. I was expecting you to start directly with the characters, but i loved how you first set the scene like that and then moved onto Joonmyun. His POV was perfect, all of this thoughts and feelings were so greatly written for me. I smiled all through the fic even if he was feeling down, pinning silently and subconsciously lol there was a moment that made me so happy:
"He doesn’t like leaving Jongin behind, or Sehun. It’s the thought of them - knowing that his little found family is counting on him - that spurs Joonmyun into completing his task. With a mouth full of rabbits, Joonmyun proudly makes his way back to their camp to drop them at Jongin’s feet. He doesn’t have a mate, and Jongin isn’t his omega, but his chest balloons with pride when Jongin strokes long fingers through his fur, pushing his face to Joonmyun’s to thank him."
I loved this part.
As you used Junmyeon's POV, i expected him to be the first one to realize his feelings. But I was pleasantly surprised to find that it was Jongin. Jongin was a great character, i loved how caring he was and how well he took care of Sehun. I loved Sukai's comfortable relationship, the fact that they slept together was really cute.
Another thing i loved a lot was that you acknowledged a lot of things, like sehun's abandonment and why he was abandoned. Even if there was no answer, the fact that Joonmyun worried about that was good. Sukai's relationship and how it would affect future possible courtings was really well handled too. thank you for that.
I enjoyed Baekhyun's character a lot. He was so perceptive of when Joonmyun needed help. There was a moment when Baekhyun crawled inside his tent without saying a word that I really loved, it showed a lot about his character and about his friendship with Joonmyun.
All the rest of the characters were great. Yifan as the alpha was a great choice. And i really loved Yixing.
Now, to the real main character. I ABSOLUTELY LOVED SEHUN!!! thank you so much for writing him as puppy, his energy, his playfulness, it was so perfect! but what I loved the most was how not only sukai bonded over taking care of him, but so did the rest of the pack. It was beautiful to see how he adapted. that was excellent.
Really, thank you so much for writing such a beautiful story ^^
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Date: 2017-01-05 05:53 pm (UTC)I loved how you started the fic, the image of the wolves from a different POV. I was expecting you to start directly with the characters, but i loved how you first set the scene like that and then moved onto Joonmyun. His POV was perfect, all of this thoughts and feelings were so greatly written for me. I smiled all through the fic even if he was feeling down, pinning silently and subconsciously lol there was a moment that made me so happy:
"He doesn’t like leaving Jongin behind, or Sehun. It’s the thought of them - knowing that his little found family is counting on him - that spurs Joonmyun into completing his task. With a mouth full of rabbits, Joonmyun proudly makes his way back to their camp to drop them at Jongin’s feet. He doesn’t have a mate, and Jongin isn’t his omega, but his chest balloons with pride when Jongin strokes long fingers through his fur, pushing his face to Joonmyun’s to thank him."
I loved this part.
As you used Junmyeon's POV, i expected him to be the first one to realize his feelings. But I was pleasantly surprised to find that it was Jongin. Jongin was a great character, i loved how caring he was and how well he took care of Sehun. I loved Sukai's comfortable relationship, the fact that they slept together was really cute.
Another thing i loved a lot was that you acknowledged a lot of things, like sehun's abandonment and why he was abandoned. Even if there was no answer, the fact that Joonmyun worried about that was good. Sukai's relationship and how it would affect future possible courtings was really well handled too. thank you for that.
I enjoyed Baekhyun's character a lot. He was so perceptive of when Joonmyun needed help. There was a moment when Baekhyun crawled inside his tent without saying a word that I really loved, it showed a lot about his character and about his friendship with Joonmyun.
All the rest of the characters were great. Yifan as the alpha was a great choice. And i really loved Yixing.
Now, to the real main character. I ABSOLUTELY LOVED SEHUN!!! thank you so much for writing him as puppy, his energy, his playfulness, it was so perfect! but what I loved the most was how not only sukai bonded over taking care of him, but so did the rest of the pack. It was beautiful to see how he adapted. that was excellent.
Really, thank you so much for writing such a beautiful story ^^